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  Raj Arumugam posted 3 weeks ago

Ajitnambiar  -  that's the problem with contests.  This may sound arrogant - but hey, we are serious about poetry, aren't we? Choose pictures of your own (heaps on the internet).
Or use original pictures you take to write more of yor poems. (Remember to check for copyright first.)

If you need any website references for pictures, just drop me a note.

I say this to you because your writings reveal a very original mind and I think there's a lot there in the mind of yours that will be unlocked  when you choose your own stimuli.



  ajitnambiar posted 3 weeks ago

I knew the pic of a girl from white society,,,,,,,,,,,,is no where linked to the poem but since it was a contest..........i had no option left



  Raj Arumugam posted 3 weeks ago

ajitnambiar -
a strong poem (and really a poem) about  the  bias against girls (presumably in India);
the imagery of the crcufixion and then worship is so apt and reflects well the
sufferings of women in the kind of gender bias and persecution that
seems to happen in India. 

* The picture is of a white girl and as western societies do not generally have this problem you allude to in your peom, the picture takes away some of the poem's power. A picture of an indian girl, perhaps in the shadows, will be more suitable.

*  The second stanza  has such a ntaural and strong build-up to   its last 2  lines: 
and the reason
a girl child is a curse.


Love the poem.



  ajitnambiar posted 1 month ago

thanks writer at heart



  ajitnambiar posted 1 month ago

hey be4ena ......i will soon vistit your blogs .
i liked potter very much



  ajitnambiar posted 1 month ago

okay sav
thanks for the comment



  writer at heart posted 1 month ago

Ajit ji,

Nice one. Enjoyed reading it.



  binagupta posted 1 month ago

ajitji
another ace
loved all lines

these were great

often I ask  "why me?"
tied to social norms
made to lie on the bed of thorns
crucified and then worshipped
and yet ,never free to be born
imaginations tied before it learns to fly
feelings buried , before it dies
words fenced, before it flows
expressions extinguished
before it glows!


bina



  Savio Ferreira posted 1 month ago

Reading it I wondered how every female who read might have felt really a nice one.
Again i tell you whenever you post anything look up on the window youll find " size " and click " medium " your font size irritates cant read it comfortably.
This font size I have taken is " medium "



  ajitnambiar posted 1 month ago

thanks yashji for the commet





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